According to the passage, "Imitation of Film: Here's Smoking at You, Kid", Nicholas Balakar states that more and more children the age who are between 10 to 14 start smoking is because the imitation of film. Researchers demonstrated that 38% of children who started to smoke was after they have seen their favorite actors smoked in the film. Nicholas Balakar also points out that "Kids begin to view R-rated movies which contain twice as much smoking at about fourth or fifth grade." That means kids have been affected by these types of movies when they are so young. Furthemore, she says that children who have the greatest exposure to smoke in movies is also one of the reasons that why they start to smoke. Nicholas Balakar also uses the researches to prove that the problem of the youngest's smoke is become much more serious and she suggests that the society need to pay attention on it.
Today, one of the technologies that the children will be always connected is television. When they go home after school, the first thing that they will do is to turn on the TV. This is the reason why the films which are shown in the television can have a critical effect on youngest. From the passage,"children ages 10 to 14 are much more likely to take up smoking if they have seen actors smoke in the movies", this had proved that how easy for the movies to affect the childish mind and attitudes. For instance, my two cousins who i am living with, they always learn the way that the actors speak. Even the way they speak is rude, also sometimes include the "bad words" that they should not be learned, they still think themselves are so "cool" and keep on saying it. Therefore, we can recognize the actors who are acting in the movies will become a model for the young child to imitate.
Moreover, children who are so young are the most easily affected. It is because they cannot determine what is good and what is bad. They will just learn directly what they have seen and without thinking of the effects that will bring to them. By using the passage's research, "Our studies show that kids begin to view R-rated movies at about fourth or fifth grade", this shows that because they are not old enough and without ability to make decisions by themselves.
In conclusion, the effects of imitation of film can be so solemn for the kids. Not only the problem of smoking, but also some other problems like robbing, violence, etc. So, we need to pay attention for those harmfulness. Otherwise, the young kids will be so dangerous.
Hello I am a student in Dr. X’s class and I was asked to give feedback on your revision of the CAT.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all,
I cannot tell it you have a thesis and claim. You summarized the reading well but you forgot to put your thesis and claim.
Next,
Your reasons connected to the topic well and are easy to understand. One reason I liked was “From the passage….this had proved that how easy for the movies to affect the childish mind and attitudes.
You only gave only one reason. (You need at least two)
Also,
Your evidence was very brief. You gave only one example about your cousin. It needed more detail, so it could have been easy for a reader to understand your idea.
Lastly, I would like you to know that,
The whole was a bit hard to read. You were missing your claim and thesis so I didn’t know what to expect in your essay, your reason and evidence were very brief it need a little more details and examples.